Have you tried moving it a bit left just to see if it changes how the work is viewed? It may not make a difference but maybe it would. It would be great if you could post one like that just so we could see if it makes it more palatable. Other than the 'O', this is a great design. The design of the 'O' is also very nice, just doesn't quite work with the rest of the letters, but I can see why it would be part of the word.....just my 2cents and really, you've done a much better jub than I ever could.....