I am working on a banner set and am working on the concept. I am fairly happy with this one but would like some other eyes to take a look as well. Honest opinions please. Thanks. :)
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I am working on a banner set and am working on the concept. I am fairly happy with this one but would like some other eyes to take a look as well. Honest opinions please. Thanks. :)
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First I have to say beautiful work! I love the cherry blossoms but I prefer the first one with the fuller blossoms. I'm not keen on the O in Originals ( this might be just me) All in all a very nice piece.
I would also say that the artwork is beautiful.
But...
The 'O' of ORIGINALS doesn't work at all.
When I look at it, it reads 'RIGINALS'
The 'O' is beautifully designed but it doesn't fit in with the word if you try and read it.
Well, that's my honest opinion.
Nice work. Great colouring, But, I'm with Frances here. The O is offputting, with the rest of the text. I don't know if it's the floor shadow, with the reflection of the remaining text. or the positioning of the O, or the dark ring around the O. Heck, it must be the O. Then again, it might be just me too.
Jim
Thanks guys. Hmmm, not sure what to do about the "O". That is the client's logo and she wants it in the banner. I designed everything else but the logo so I'm kind of stuck with it.
Well, if you're stuck with it, perhaps reducing it in size might help it become a bit more part of the word....I agree with the fuller leaved branch as well, pretty nice design overall.....
That's an idea Karateed. I think i will also see if she minds the removal of the shadow...I really dont like that myself Tim. This has given me food for thought. Thanks again everyone.
OK, here is my revision and I think this is what I am going to present. I have added a rice paper overlay and made the colors a bit richer so it is more inline with the oriental art feel I am going for. I also made the "O" smaller, removed the shadow and the reflection and added a black outline to help better incorporate the "O" with the rest of the logo. I also think it helps somehow connect it better with the cherry blossom branch. Oh, and I also changed the "O" color to better match the blossoms...not so bright pink.
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One other idea comes to mind. To me it seems like the 'O' is infringing on the R in the word originals....I'm curious to how moving the 'O' a bit left would work....it might not but it's just a thought......
I like it. Much cleaner, less distracting.
Jim
Good idea Kara..I moved the O back a bit and it does help.
Another thought, is it just the circular dragon crest that is the client logo? if so you could try tucking the crest behind the complete word originals. Perhaps something like this
(Note I just used arial for this just to give you an idea)
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Hi Angelize. Yeah, the dragon and crest along with its position to the rest of the text is really part of the logo so I dont think I can change that. I have taken some liberties as is so not sure I can go that far. I have sent the mock-up to her so we'll see what she thinks. :)
I agree, sorry but that logo as an O doesn't seem to work.Quote:
Originally Posted by Karateed
Do you think altering the design of the O might help, move it to the left a little and perhaps adding an inner bevel to represent an O better?Quote:
Originally Posted by wizard509
Stygg
it may but really the logo cant be changed more than I have since it is the clients logo. I wonder if I should tell her that O just does not work. :)
Have you tried moving it a bit left just to see if it changes how the work is viewed? It may not make a difference but maybe it would. It would be great if you could post one like that just so we could see if it makes it more palatable. Other than the 'O', this is a great design. The design of the 'O' is also very nice, just doesn't quite work with the rest of the letters, but I can see why it would be part of the word.....just my 2cents and really, you've done a much better jub than I ever could.....
I think the problem of the RIGINALS not looking joined to the 'O' of the logo is due to the styling and colouring.
Here's my suggestion.
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The font is Komika Axis.
Well, for me, the logo just does not substitute the 'O' in ORIGINALS.
How about this for an idea?!
The 'O' is slightly hidden behind the logo.
Yep, be brave and tell her :)Quote:
Originally Posted by GCFL
Stygg
I like that sledger, nice font, maybe he should change the Original to your font and colours, move to right a little and leave the dragon logo as it is, may be like this.Quote:
Originally Posted by sledger
Stygg
Yeah, I do like that much better but I cant change the font since its part of her logo. I made the artwork on the banner but the logo is the clients so I will see if she will allow me to change her logo but I doubt it. All great feedback everyone. I really appreciate it. Certainly makes the design process fun.
bummer! client did not like the cherry blossoms. All the talk about her logo and she dislikes the part I liked. She wants a lotus flower. Back to the drawing board. :/
Best to get a clear brief before you start work, and a down payment with an agreement that the cost includes two revisions only.
Too many 'clients' are under the impression that artwork, graphic and web design is a five minute job :(
And she likes her logo... some people have a very hmmmm how shall I put it... 'interesting' view on design.