Is this good enough

Originally intended for Angelize 3D challenge but it has no 3D so I was thinking about submitting this to Gary for the Holiday show, but I not sure if it's good enough or long enough. I wanted to do more of a lead in and more of an ending and make it a full rounded story but this is what I have. What do you think?

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looks cool to me Larry - go for it - I don't think length matters, and the story seems clear enough to me - [maybe an empty bottle of claret might add authenticity, but I'm being deliberately picky :D]

Thanks Steve